Author: Sim-Antinl
Plot or Cover/Blurb:
I mean it appears to be a plot that goes along with most others that I have read with a damaged individual that has some issues. However, the way you write it makes the plot seem like it will turn out to be unique and that there will be some nice plot twists thrown in as well. Also, I don't think that this was boring or dragged at all, the pace was good and kept my interested in what was going to happen.
4/5
Grammar:
I didn't notice any mistakes or even sentences that were questionable. From what I read at the bottom of the chapters it seems like you have had multiple people edit for you which is always a great thing.
4/5
Descriptions:
*rolls eyes*
You don't describe everything but you describe enough and do it in a simple way that isn't boring or cheesy which I really appreciate.
4/5
Characters:
You develop your character really well which is obviously important seems how the book is about him and it is more a psychological based plot as well. I think that you really make his character traits obvious and not in an annoying way either, it just seems natural. Which is obviously a really good thing.
4/5
What I Hated/Thoughts:
First off, I'm mad at you. I know I specified "no porn" but it was my way of saying nothing even remotely sexual or hinting at doing the dirty (which I guess I should clarify now in my rules). And you were so sneaky about it in your writing to that I didn't realize until he mentioned pulling out. I'm mad about it. I know it wasn't descriptive, but I'm not really a fan of reading that kind of stuff even if there is literally no straight up mention of banging happening. It is not my kind of thing, it makes me overly uncomfortable. Just Ew.
Also, I kept reading because I like your writing, but that just makes me even more mad.
I'm a sucker for psychological thrillers I love them and I always will and this one isn't any different. But I didn't read past the second chapter because of the warning in the beginning about mature content. It's not my thing so I'm not going to read it, it's just that simple.
2/5
Because I'm still mad at you. XD
Overall:
This is a very well written story, however I will hold a grudge for life and I don't really want to read any more suggestive parts. I don't care if I sound like an infant, it just is what it is. Seriously though, good job, you have a very good start.
Final Score:
18/25
