Author: Callie_Vinn
Plot:
This is in an alternate world or reality, at least I'm pretty sure, not positive seems how I didn't read past chapter two. Either way you have an interesting concept that you bring to light enough that I get a small understanding for what is going on in the world without feeling like it is an info dump.
But seriously, you manage to weave everything in there effortlessly, and in a way that makes it easy to understand and doesn't hinder the flow of the story AND on top of that you don't give away too much either.
4/5
Grammar:
You have grammar from what I saw, honestly I wasn't paying any attention to it which is a good thing, because it means I was enjoying reading your book.
5/5
Descriptions:
*rolls eyes*
I feel like you probably already know that you're really good at descriptions and making the reader feel immersed in the world. But either way you did really good here and I enjoyed the way that you describe things. Also, I feel the need to say that the way you write is wonderful in the way that it is more formal (by that I mean your writing doesn't read like a thirteen year old wrote it) but it also doesn't read like you have a stick so far up your ass that it could puncture a lung.
5/5
Characters:
*rolls eyes*
Good characters and good descriptions are my weakness, they make my knees weak and breathe life into my dead heart. So, listen, I love your characters. They have personality, even the ones in the prologue had personality, something that you could read and enjoy reading.
Seriously, I love them. I don't have anything technical to say about it, I'm still trying to recover.
5/5
What I Hated/Thoughts:
Duuuuuudddeee listen, the book before this review I read a prologue where the the MC (as a young child) witnesses the death of her parents. And during the duration of it I didn't feel anything for the characters. I literally just did that one so as I went from that to the beginning of your prologue I wanted to hit my head off a wall and stop, because my allotment of questionable prologues is usually one. However, I decided that I needed to just suck it up and keep reading.
And, I'm glad that I did! You took this super common occurrence to have in a prologue and turned it into something worth reading and better yet actually interesting to read. I felt something for that boy and girl, you showcased their emotions perfectly and even built up some suspense that didn't feel over the top or just straight up annoying.
Once the boy was shot, I was for sure that you were going to let the girl live, especially when the killer people said something about it being done and over (not the exact thing but I'm too lazy to go back and look for it). I was ready to chew you out for that because I feel like no great assassin would call that good and move on. And then, you didn't leave it as just that and they ended up killing the girl. The best part though was how you took your time with building up to the eventual death of the boy and then took some more time before killing the girl. If you had rushed it it would've been shit.
I like the first chapter too ugh, you really write a story that I want to read with my entire heart and enjoy for the rest of my life.
5/5
Overall:
I know that I didn't give you a perfect score, but listen, I literally just gave someone a perfect score a couple of books ago and I have to stick to my rude and too honest brand. Therefore I took you down a point even though I don't have an issue with this book at all. So, don't take it personally, it's not you, it's me.
On another note though, just keep doing what you're doing, I'll probably keep reading your book later. And if/when I finish it, depending on how I feel, I'll come back and edit this score.
Final Score:
24/25
