Author: TheoraBertalan
Plot:
I really like this plot. It's unique and paced perfectly so that I don't feel like it's dragging or speeding along way too fast. It seems interesting, with some extra layers that the characters bring in that really help sell the plot and the story.
4/5
Grammar:
I didn't find any grammatical errors, though it is possible that they were there but I was having too much fun reading it, to pay much attention. So, if you haven't yet, I really suggest reading over and double checking, but I think you're set grammar wise.
5/5
Descriptions:
*sighs*
I love your descriptions. They are not the prettiest that I have ever read or the deepest, but they are still really good. You keep it practical and short, but still have that perfect balance to keep me interested and not in the dark.
5/5
Characters:
Iris: I really like her, she doesn't seem to be a push-over, scared woman, or the kind who can kick ass like it's her job. She seems real and down to earth. You've really developed her character well in such a short time, that I care about what happens to her next.
Ethan: So I think that Ethan is the guy she met in the building in the middle of the night because of the eyebrow piercing, but I could be wrong. Either way, his character is super strong as well. You really kept his character consistent and realistic with I really appreciate.
Cody: I keep running out of words so that I don't depeat myself, but the same goes for him. You've really developed him well in only a few chapters that I really do want to learn more about him (and the others).
You write these characters so well, I need to stop reapeating myself because I think you get the picture. But, still, amazing!
5/5
Overall:
I really liked this book, and plan to keep reading it as you update. You really have something good here that I can't wait to see unfold overtime!
Final Score:
19/20
(because I'm a grinch and can't give a perfect score ;)
