Author: immatrytoread
Plot:
Ehh, I'm going to dock you because I felt like it was dragging and wasn't going to get to a point in a long time. Or that things will happen but it will all be in slow motion. I could be wrong, but those are the vibes that I get from the first chapter.
3/5
Grammar:
It seemed fine, there are a few sentences that are a little sketchy here and there but I didn't read anything overly offensive.
4/5
Descriptions:
You know how to describe things, good for you. I don't hate how you describe, it just isn't my favorite style of descriptions. Probably partially has to do with the tone that I mention below.
3/5
Characters:
As much as I didn't overly enjoy the first chapter you do a good job with outlining and showing off your main character and some of the other characters. I felt like you did a very good job introducing him and laying out some of his characteristics without literally shoving them down my throat. And with that kind of start I'm going to assume that you keep it up down the road.
4/5
What I Hated/Thoughts:
The things that I hated in this book are strictly issues with my own taste and not exactly issues with your story. Just keep that in mind as you read what I have to say.
You use a lot of big words that I have never in my life seen before that I had to kind of guess to read. Personally, on wattpad I hate seeing big words and I feel like more of an idiot if I look up a word on wattpad versus one in an officially published book. I'm not going to tell you to dumb it down, just that there is probably a somewhat small audience for you on wattpad?
I also found the first chapter so boring, nothing really happened, I mean it did, but there wasn't anything that really made me want to read the second chapter. I think it has to do a bit with your writing style, seems how it reads like you're up your own ass a bit trying to sound high and mighty (I realize that sounds like an insult but I don't mean it as one, I just don't know how else to phrase it XD). So at times it drags a lot and is just a little much to read. It also makes me think of some of the "Adult" books I'll pick up when I'm feeling adventurous and then put down because they're too professional and adult-like.
3/5
Overall:
This book isn't for me, and reminds me of something that an older, more mature person would read. Which doesn't make it bad per se, just ehh.
Final Score:
17/25
