Author: CrystalRose00
Plot:
This story is clearly about the Salem Witch Trials, but, I'm not sure what the actual story is going to be yet. I ended up reading the prologue and the first chapter because they were so short and there really doesn't seem to be anything that stands out as to what this book is about. I guess it could be about the woman in the first chapter and maybe what lead up to her death? Or it could be about something else entirely. There really isn't anything that stands out and grabs my attention in the way of a plot.
2.5/5
Grammar:
You had a lot of issues in this department just scattered about. The writing was a bit messy just because of all the mistakes that are thrown in. But, this is a rough draft, and I think that you understand most basic grammar conventions which is good.
2.5/5
Description:
Yes and no? I don't know. You have descriptions, but they're fleeting and I'm not sure how I feel about them. The ones that you do have aren't bad, it's just hard to figure out what I want to say when there really isn't much "story" to go off of. I don't know dude, I really don't.
3/5
Characters:
You didn't really have any standout characters in the two chapters that I read. There was the woman, but she didn't come across as a character. No one was introduced or brought forth, there was no dialogue, just nothing. *shrugs*
1.5/5
What I Hated:
I hate how indentations look on wattpad, they just annoy me.
Really I didn't hate much though, it was all just eh.
3/5
Overall:
This is an okay book. I do have a few suggestions though. I think that you should turn the chapter you have labeled as the first chapter become the prologue, and then the setting the prologue can become something else. You don't technically need your current prologue, just because it doesn't do much. I don't think people need the scene to be set up so much, if you can tell a good enough story you don't need that prologue. I think that layout would make more sense when reading, just because after the first chapter you go backwards in time. It is just a suggestion and you can do as you please.
Another thing is I really think you should edit this, at least just to catch all the little mistake. Your writing isn't horrible, but the mistakes distract and detract from your story. Seriously, do the world a favor.
Final Score:
12.5
