Author: _DandelionClocks_
Stream Of Thoughts (because I don't know how to format this, sorry)
There is a small error, or at least I think it is, in the first poem. You say "quite and cold" I'm assuming that you meant quiet.
This very first poem really made sense to me. I enjoyed it. The words flow well from line to line, and what you were writing about was deep, but not the kind of english teacher, scraping the bottom of the barrel deep.
Oooohh. I really like the second poem. It has a hint of sassy personality hidden in it that I really like. And I love how this doesn't exactly connect to the poem before it, but at the same time it does.
I really like the one about revenge as well. At first I thought it was going to be like one of the "hold it all in so no one knows you're falling apart" type things. But it isn't. Instead it's all about holding a bomb ass grudge until you seek revenge.
The fourth poem is probably my favorite so far, to be honest. I really like the picture you painted here and how you walked me through an emotional journey. I feel like it's easy for ideas or thoughts to wander with poetry (I'm totally making this up because I have no clue what I'm talking about) but you seem to keep things under control, and stick with a common theme for each one.
Overall:
I really like these poems. It's not something that I normally read, but I always love having a chance to read something that I normally don't. Anyways, in your writing you seem to know what your doing and hold a sophisticated air about it. Your poems don't sound whiny, or desperate. Instead they come across as raw and real, which I really enjoy. Congratulations, I think you have done well here! :)
Final Score:
23/25 (just because I'm making this up and nothing is perfect ;)
