Author: seaofroses07
Plot:
The plot is clearly about a girl who doesn't remember anything being sent to a private school and how she copes there. I assume that at some point there will be a guy that she ends up with and drama ensues? I could be wrong but this seems like a pretty typical story you find on wattpad, but I hope that I'm wrong and it's not what I think it is!
3/5
Grammar:
There are a lot of places where you should have commas and don't, like in longer sentences or in some places in the dialogue. Now, in regards to the dialogue you keep confusing me. In the prologue most of it was not exactly correct, then in part of the first chapter it's perfect and then you switch back to being a bit shady, then again to being good. So I assume that you know what you're doing you just haven't edited it at all?
3/5
Descriptions:
You do describe some things. But, I really think the way you do it could intergrate into the writing a bit more. Which, I believe goes along with the issue of flow, as your sentences don't really glide smoothly together, instead they're inbetween smooth and choppy.
3/5
Characters:
Okay, so something that really took me by surprise was the fact that in the prologue near the end you say that she is seventeen. However, during the prologue the voice that it is in makes it sound like a little kid. I was certain that it was some five year old in the back of someone's vehicle.
Other than that you do a decent job of introducing the characters and making them diverse and a little bit unique which is something that I really appreciate. So, good for you!
4/5
Overall:
This book seems to be interesting, and possibly filled with some twists in the plot? You should go through and edit some things, like the changes in the dialogue. I don't have a ton of things to say about it, so if you have any questions feel free to ask!
Final Score:
13/20
