Author: Lady-Senpai
Plot:
The plot feels super sluggish. I mean things happen in it, but at the same time it almost feels as if nothing is happening or ever will.
3/5
Grammar:
There aren't a lot of grammar issues, I saw a couple of places where you might have needed a comma, but nothing too crazy in this department.
4/5
Descriptions:
Your descriptions are fine. They aren't breathtaking or something that wraps me up, but they are suffcient and that is what matters. You describe just enough that I have a general understanding of the enviroment. With that said you really could use more. Not a ton, but just a little more, you're almost to the perfect amount but not quite.
3/5
Characters:
I'm only going to talk about Raava, and I really don't have much to say about her.
Her character comes across as a more basic heroine, where her personality does come through. She has that hidden courageous let's fight personality, but that's about all I got from her. She doesn't seem lively, or like someone I want to meet, as her personality doesn't really come through all the way. A big selling point for me is the main character. I don't have to agree with them, or overly enjoy them, but I like a character that has a personality that I can see, and it's really hard to see Raava's.
3/5
Anything Else I Want To Take Points Off For:
There are quite a few places where the reading ends up on the more jagged end of things, instead of flowing smoothly. And places that are awkward to read, as the word doesn't fit there, or the sentence itself just doesn't feel right.
"I was on the ground, and I engaged the smell of dirt and grass."
What are you trying to say with engaged here? I'm assuming it's just the wrong word?
3/5
Overall:
This book does have some interesting things hidden beneath it, but on the surface layer it isn't something that catches my eye outright. I prefer a story that has a plot that is on fire and fast moving, and doesn't feel like it drags.
But, with that said you do have a strong structure to have a really nice book if you take the time to edit.
Final Score:
16/25
