Author: word-warrior
Plot:
Your plot has pieces and the start of ones that I have seen numerous times. But, I think that you might have a spin on yours that makes it different, but from what I am gathering it seems like it isn't super unique. This pace is something else as well. I don't know exactly if it's slow, super slow, or normal? It's hard to follow.
3/5
Grammar:
You had a few minor mistakes here and there but nothing that was too horrible.
4/5
Descriptions:
Your descriptions aren't bad, you have a lot and they are super detailed and imaginative, but there is something about your style that just doesn't interest me. I don't know what it is about it exactly because I'm all for long descriptions but yours are on the edge of being too much in my opinion.
3/5
Characters:
I only read the prologue and not the first chapter, just because I don't really feel like it at the moment.
*Edited* I read on, but what I read will only affect this section and the one below this
Ehh they're not super interesting, I feel like there's still too much fluff for me to sift through to really try and grasp them, and I'm lazy. But, they aren't terrible characters either, just ehh.
3/5
What I Hated:
It sounds like you're trying to be too whimsical and flowery and it just isn't working for me. There are too many comparisons and idk dude it's just too much. I feel like I'm literally drowning in how far you've gone with this.
Something that should've been interesting to read, became boring just because you took a decent amount of side trips that just took down the enjoyment of reading it.
I did start to read the first chapter so I could do a better review but I couldn't do it. I guess I just don't have the patience at the moment for this type of writing.
2/5
Overall:
I'm sure some people will be blown away by your writing, and I'm sure there are plenty of people that love your style of writing. I'm not it so it is what it is. I think you are a decent writer though, so don't take this too seriously.
Final Score:
15/25
