Author: IvoryLlyn
Critique:
The formatting for this will be a mixture of comments on your actual story, with some of the bigger issues here.
Well, I guess I lied. I couldn't find anything wrong with any of your poems, worth commenting about. It could be because I don't know a ton about poetry, but they still look very good to me. I read a few before calling it good enough, as a critique is generally only two chapters worth. I'm sorry that I don't have anything more for you. I enjoyed them too much ;)
