Author: navya_deepika
With poetry, I don't have a structured "review" because I can't even begin to think of one, and I don't have enough knowledge to do that. Therefore, this is going to be a simple stream of thoughts, with a rating out of ten.
Signatures:
This poem is okay. It's not enough to knock my socks off or anything, but I also don't hate it with my entire being. I feel as if the lines don't flow together very well, it feels very jolty, instead of a steady stream that wisks me around. I also feel like you kind of lost me part way through. A change from one thing to another is possible in poetry, but it has to be logicial and flow well, unless you're a crazy, insanely gifted poetry writer who can make literally anything make sense (which very few people are). I think you should maybe try and play around with your words a bit to try and fix the issues with flow. (5/10)
Death:Love you or hate you...?
Right off the bat this title kills me. Put a space after Death: and Love, and I think you should scrap the "..." some people love them, but in a title it looks a little chilidish? I don't know how to describe it, but upon seeing that I don't want to read the poem.
Again I think you need to work on flow. The same things goes for this poem as the last one, it's okay, but with some extra attention it could be a lot better. I really suggest reading it out loud so that you can mentally get a bit more understanding for what I am saying. (5/10)
My own light
Is that a title or not? If it's the title of a poem then "own" and "light" should start with capitals.
I think something else you should look into is wording. Try and find some words that aren't super common and basic to bring more life into your poetry. It can really up the experience and make the reader get more into it. Also, the same goes for here as well, the lines themselves don't flow, let alone from one line to the next. You really need to work on this. But other than that you're doing just fine. (5/10)
