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🔖Little White Lies

Author: AsheraJones

Reviewer: anonymousnew00

🔹Cover : 8/10

The cover is simple and good. The choice of fonts was amazing! The only factor I think it lacked was the attractivity. It has scope to be more intriguing. All in all, a nice try at the cover but I think it has the potential to be better. Also the fonts of the subtitles are a bit blurry.

🔹Title : 8/10

Title is good and matches the blurb and somewhat story, but a very common title for such stories. There would be more than a hundred stories in general with this title. Although it's apt for your story. But it would be better if you had put more effort in choosing the title.

🔹Blurb : 7/10

Blurb is a little intriguing, but it's not that catchy and I think the people won't get attracted to the story immediately by reading the blurb. You should be more creative.

🔹Creativity : 6/10

You have to work on creativity. There is not much interesting stuff happening with the story. Your plot has potential to be more creative, and you have to utilize it. There is not much new stuff in the story which can make readers hook up to the story.

🔹Plot: 9/10

From the starting, the story picked a nice flow and was going in a smooth way, but after 3-4 chapters the pace of the story became slow. Other than casual conversations between characters there was nothing for readers to hook up. The conversation between Chole and Nick was so confusing, well they have this understanding between them where words are not needed, but as a reader, you will have a problem in understanding what they are talking about suddenly. (This review is based on first 7 chapters of story)

🔹Characters: 9/10

I liked the way you introduced the characters, as even after having so much character, I didn't feel the need to go back and check them. Character development and bonding between characters is very good, especially Megan and Chole. As I have already mentioned, understanding between Chole and Nick is amazing. You have done a good job with the characters.

🔹Grammer: 11/15

There is some typo mistake like instead of bag, it's boy. In conversation between characters you have used too much casual English. Although sometimes it's ok, but using it too much distracts readers, and they skip reading that part. You need to proofread your chapters before publishing it.

🔹Communication With Readers: 3/5

There aren't many comments but your response to the comment is quick.

🔹Overall Impression : 9/15

Good story! I liked the way it began and I think this story has potential, work on creativity and plot, and also proofread your chapters.

Good job!

Total 70/100

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