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''ᴇᴠᴇʀyᴏɴᴇ ɪꜱ ᴀ ᴡʀɪᴛᴇʀ, ꜱᴏᴍᴇ ᴀʀᴇ ᴡʀɪᴛᴛᴇɴ ɪɴ ᴛʜᴇ ʙᴏᴏᴋꜱ ᴀɴᴅ ꜱᴏᴍᴇ ᴀʀᴇ ᴄᴏɴꜰɪɴᴇᴅ ᴛᴏ ʜᴇᴀʀᴛꜱ.''
- ꜱᴀᴠɪ ꜱʜᴀʀᴍᴀ
We invest our best into writing but at times, the outcome we receive is below our expectations. This could...
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• COVER : 6/10
I think it can be made a lot better. The background image isn't much of an attraction and the font is too cursive. Author name is too small.
• TITLE : 6/10
It's weird. You could have rhymed the 'words' and 'emotions'. Better make the title a bit vague. Like 'Flowing Emotions' or 'Deeper than Ocean'.
• BLURB : 8/10
It is good but I will advise you to increase it's length.
• FIRST POEM : 8/10
The first poem was very nicely constructed but it was lacking hidden meanings. Poems should be written in a way that the readers will have to read it thoroughly to understand it's nook and corner. Otherwise it would become a story book.
Here's a suggestion, try involving personifications and symbolisms.
• MESSAGE : 10/10
Your poems had all sorts of messages including war, heartbreak and homosexuality. That really did please me. I really loved how you focused on all the problems mankind- sorry-small minded people are facing. Might as well increase their brain capacity.
• GRAMMAR : 8/10
I already commented on the areas where there were grammatical errors.
• CREATIVITY : 7/10
Things are lacking in this section. You do describe sensory details well but the creativity in your writing is a bit lacking. Try symbolic colours and items. Try using symbolism and personification to enhance the effect on the readers. Nicer words will help too.
• RHYTHM : 8/10
You did maintain a nice flow or rhythm but your lines were sometimes short or long. That ruined the rhythm a bit though it flowed together nicely. Try making the lines of same length.
If the lines are long, then rhyme the first line with the second line. If the lines are short, then rhyme the first line with the third. Otherwise, try to make all the lines of same length.
• READER'S INVOLVEMENT: 4/5
It was very interesting but just because the symbolisms were missing, it was making the poem plain and simple like a story book.
• COMMUNICATION : 0/5
You are not doing it at all.
• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 8/10
Your poems do have potential but just the necessary changes can give it a whole new dimension and meaning.
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• TOTAL : 73/100
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