ᒪIᗷᖇᗩᖇY ᖇᗴᐯIᗴᗯՏ 2.0

🔖 Tears Unnumbered

Author : v3Olympus

Reviewer : Ouryoaie

• COVER : 10/10

The cover was very attractive and I liked the artwork and symbols, especially how the texts were placed. It's something that can grab a reader's attention at once. It also matches the tone set by your blurb.

• TITLE : 10/10

The title is nice and I like how it was expressed in your blurb. It is a fitting title and it kind of goes with the story.

• BLURB : 8/10

Okay, your blurb was really good and it honestly kind of had a really sad tone which is good if it is something you are going for. It doesn't say much about the story except speak for the characters and there are blurbs like that which is nice, but the way it's presented feels like a story for a particular audience and if it is possible for you to add a little more detail about the type of world they live in, it would be more clearer to readers.
In other words, your blurb is good, but I don't think it's powerful enough to rope in readers or get them invested in reading the story.
But when I opened the book, I saw this;
Set during the 1840's in a small town in Ireland.
This is honestly a better start and something I feel could replace or start off your blurb; the whole paragraph and not just that one line.

• CREATIVITY : 8/10

Your story had a poetic feel and I was dragged into it, or rather, absorbed as I kept reading. Apart from the environment, I like the way you set the atmosphere and I could feel just how gloomy and surreal it was while reading.
It was also well written and I really enjoyed it. The story line was somewhat unique too and even though the pacing was a bit slow, it was very good and worth reading. Your descriptions were especially beautiful, though a bit heavy sometimes.
Regardless, the style makes the story seem like it's directed towards a specific kind of readers.

• PLOT : 8/15

The plot is good and I don't think it really needs any work. But it felt a bit slow. I feel it is more character driven than plot driven because the story feels kind of dull, but your characters help considerably with this.

• CHARACTERS : 10/10

I really liked how you took the time to focus on each character and how they are affected by their s=circumstances. They felt very realistic and honestly seem to push the story forward. I especially like the banshee and how she struggles with her emotions.
Your characters are well thought out.

• GRAMMAR : 14/15

Your grammar was very good and you paid full attention to it. I also like how you didn't include unnecessary dialogue tags and I like the way the conversations flowed smoothly. Though, I suggest researching on how to use punctuation in your dialogue.
"What will you do?" She asks before she can stop herself.
I suggest it's written this way;
"What will you do?" she asks before she can stop herself.
"What will you do?" She eyes the silhouette before her.
"I have done it," he says.

• COMMUNICATION : 5/5

You really conversed well with your readers and that was very appreciated.

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 10/15

Your description was very beautiful and tried to keep the slow pacing of the story at bay. Personally, the story is god but it was . . . I seriously don't know how to put the words. It's a very good story but it is somewhat dull and there isn't actually anything you can do about it as the story has a peculiar style of its own. It can be a favourites especially for those who like word play but at a point it felt tiring to read.
It's something perfect for reading during relaxation and this is just my personal opinion and what I felt about the book. It is a very fine work of art but I would really like to see this on a larger scale with a more interesting plot.
I think the plot was a bit of a problem here, but still, it is something a lot of people will like.

• TOTAL : 83/100

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