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🔖 Underneath Blossoms//CSB TXT

Author : STARRYEONJUN

Reviewer : belkisaris

• COVER : 10/10

I love the cover is very light and intriguing and really well done. Covers are hard to do and the fact that you made yours perfect it's impressive you have awe in me and if I was searching for a book to read I would have to click on yours based on the cover.

• TITLE : 10/10

Just like with the cover, the title is perfect and goes really well with the story.

• BLURB : 4/10

Although the blurb has a sense of mystery in it. It's very confusing and it might turn off potential readers, which would be a shame because you have created a really great story here. I would suggest re-reading your story and try to come up with a blurb that doesn't give too much info, but it tells potential readers why they should read it.

• CREATIVITY : 10/10

Story is very creative and completely yours. I can honestly tell you I was impressed by the creativity and fell in love after a couple of chapters. You have done a great job creating an amazing story.

• PLOT : 15/15

You created an amazing plot here. I have seen another story about two lovers that separated because of something in the story, then find each other again. Although this plot was like the other story, I could see your own spin on it and it was totally original and a skilled job.

• CHARACTERS : 8/10

The interaction between characters was mostly conversation and telling us how they felt instead of showing us. For example, when Soobing was telling his friend about the childhood romance, you stated that he paused to take a breath as it was getting harder and harder to keep talking because of a lump in his throat. That's ok as it is, but it's leaning into telling instead of showing. Maybe try something like Sobbing took a deep breath and gulped down his own saliva as it was stuck in his throat preventing him from continuing with the story for a moment. It doesn't have to be like that, but I hope it helps.

• GRAMMAR : 15/15

Grammar was perfect, and description was ok. You did a great job with mostly showing instead of telling. There were instances where there was a time of telling, but they were brief.

• COMMUNICATION : 5/5

You kept with every single comment. Magnificent job!

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 15/15

Like I said about your creativity, you did an amazing job with this story and as soon as I have some free time in my hands I will come back to this amazing story to find out how it ends.

• TOTAL : 92/100