ᒪIᗷᖇᗩᖇY ᖇᗴᐯIᗴᗯՏ 2.0

🔖 Unbreak With Me

Author : debbieryan12

Reviewer : Simasye_Maulidi

• COVER : 10/10

The cover is brilliant, the font is clear. I like how you already give us an image of what the story will be like, without giving off too much! Well done.

• TITLE : 10/10

The title is very catchy, Just like what I stated again. You give your readers a few hints. Which in actuality, it's supposed to be like.

• BLURB : 7/10

The blurb is alright. It tells us about the characters, which is key, though, we already know it's a cliche. I kind of felt a little deflated after looking at an awesome title and cover.

• CREATIVITY : 5/10

I've noted that you're lagging in this category. Your potential is just sitting there, waiting be used. You're not giving your readers a lot to imagine. I've heard this a lot when it comes to my writing as well, that it felt like they were reading a script. Try to give something to work with, thoughts, feelings and descriptions of their current setting.

• PLOT : 13/15

Your plot is great. It flows together with the story.

• CHARACTERS : 10/10

I like how there different characters in your story and how you built them. They work well with your writing. Great job on this.

• GRAMMAR : 15/15

I found no problem with your grammar.

• COMMUNICATION : 5/5

You've got excellent skills here. It's important to make your readers feel appreciated by acknowledging what they said.

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 10/15

Just to sum up what was said above. Your cover and title kept me going and again well done on that. It draws me in without giving too much off. The blurb is a little cliche, but it's the journey of the story that matters and not the ending.
The only thing I'd say you should work on is building your world a little more, by incorporating more descriptions into your writing. I found multiple errors with your punctuation. I pointed out a few to give you an idea of what I mean. It got to a point Where I just accepted it. Please work on that. It made it really difficult for me to read.
Aside from that, you've got an amazing plot, great cover, and title. The writing should be just as great as the story idea in your mind. It maybe a bit tedious but remember why you started writing do it to the best of your ability! I wish you all the best in your writing endeavors! Hope you're doing great.

• TOTAL : 85/100

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