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''ᴇᴠᴇʀyᴏɴᴇ ɪꜱ ᴀ ᴡʀɪᴛᴇʀ, ꜱᴏᴍᴇ ᴀʀᴇ ᴡʀɪᴛᴛᴇɴ ɪɴ ᴛʜᴇ ʙᴏᴏᴋꜱ ᴀɴᴅ ꜱᴏᴍᴇ ᴀʀᴇ ᴄᴏɴꜰɪɴᴇᴅ ᴛᴏ ʜᴇᴀʀᴛꜱ.''
- ꜱᴀᴠɪ ꜱʜᴀʀᴍᴀ
We invest our best into writing but at times, the outcome we receive is below our expectations. This could...
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• COVER : 8/10
The background picture is amazing and it coincides perfectly with the plot but the text is not visible. The title is perfectly written but the tagline and author name is almost blurred.
• TITLE : 10/10
It's unique but it goes perfectly with your poems. It also has a tinge of longing and the essence of loving someone else with all your heart.
• BLURB : 8/10
It is good but I will advise you to increase it's length.
• FIRST POEM : 8/10
The first poem was very nicely constructed but it was lacking emotions. You were trying to show how the girl missed her friend and you did describe it nicely but I couldn't feel the thing which you described. It can be done when you use more complex words and sentence construction. Also, try comparing the situations or feelings with something that is common. That'll have more effect.
• MESSAGE : 10/10
The message is upon friendship. How much can you do for friendship? That is an interesting topic because I watched a Thai series of the same topic a few days back. Lol. That is a very weird coincidence. In case you are wondering, it is named Ugly Duckling: Boy's Paradise. You can watch it if you want. It was amazing.
• GRAMMAR : 7/10
I already commented on the areas where there were grammatical errors.
• CREATIVITY : 7/10
Things are lacking in this section. You do describe sensory details well but the creativity in your writing is a bit lacking. Try symbolic colours and items. Try using symbolism and personification to enhance the effect on the readers.
• RHYTHM : 8/10
You did maintain a nice flow or rhythm but your lines were sometimes short or long. That ruined the rhythm a bit though it flowed together nicely. Try making the lines of same length.
If the lines are long, then rhyme the first line with the second line. If the lines are short, then rhyme the first line with the third.
• READER'S INVOLVEMENT : 3/5
It was very interesting but just because the symbolisms were missing, it was making the poem plain and simple like a story book.
• COMMUNICATION : 5/5
You are doing it perfect.
• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 8/10
Your poems do have potential but just the necessary changes can give it a whole new dimensions.
That's all I wanna say.
Thank you and in case you have any questions, pm me or comment below after TAGGING me.
• TOTAL : 82/100
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