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🔖 Dawn Of Red Destiny

Author : PeachyUnicorns64

Reviewer : Aesthetically_Lazy

• COVER : 7/10

It's a good cover but I don't find it very attractive. The fonts are good and go well together but I just think the image is a little too dark. Maybe add the right filters? That might help

• TITLE : 10/10

I am in love with your title! It's unique and portraits the story well. Good job!

• BLURB : 8/10

I mean it's not a bad blurb but I think you can work on your language over here. The first line is great! It gives a really good first impression of the story. In the second paragraph, you write "she fortuitously explores Tyler Hechlin and why destiny brought them together." This doesn't really make sense. So she meets Tyler Hechlin and then she questions if destiny brought them together? You need to frame this properly because there might be many other readers who may not know what you are talking about. The sentence, "Coming from a broken home could be connected to the perfect man she runs to ground." also does not make sense. What are you trying to say over here? Is this a question, a statement? Frame these properly. Other than that, everything is great and you have done a great job giving the precise details.

• CREATIVITY : 10/10

The idea is pretty unique and this story actually has great potential. Good job on this one!

• CHARACTERS : 9/10

The characters are portrayed well but it wouldn't hurt to describe them a little more. I like the MC's personality a lot and that shows that if people can relate to your character you are doing it right!

• PLOT : 13/15

I would say the plot is rather slow. Maybe it's because of the length of the chapters but the first five chapters that I read were pretty slow. Having longer chapters doesn't really hurt unless having short chapters has a meaning for you. I would say just pace things up with the plot.

• GRAMMAR : 11/15

You change your tenses a lot and you have many punctuation errors and typos but you can fix those while editing. You can also work with your language because you used some words which didn't really make sense in that particular sentence if that makes sense?

• COMMUNICATION : 4/5

You have replied to almost all the comments but maybe try replying to them all. It never hurts to reply to comments. It's actually really fun to read people's opinion about your books- good and bad. So yeah, just try to reply to all the comments.

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 13/15

At first sight, I wasn't very fond of the story because I do judge a book by its cover and I didn't find your cover quite attractive. Your blurb also needed a little bit of work. But after reading the first chapter, you kinda had me hooked which is kind of the main goal of the story, right? Your story ideas are really good. It really kept me on the edge of my seat. This is a great story and it would be really popular among the people if you just worked on the things that are holding it back.

• TOTAL : 85/100

Great job! If you have any questions, you can pm me :)