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🔖 Poetry

Author : theoneandonlyweirdo2

Reviewer : JariaMirza14

• COVER : 8/10

I can see you went for the minimalistic vibe, usually that's great for poetry! What I would say though, the font can be changed a bit (have you tried virtual? Or six gaps?) the colours can be adjusted too, to make it more attractive, you can go for a lighter/deeper mauve, up to you but I would say a lighter shade if your going for a dark font.

• TITLE : 6/10

The little makes it very clear that this is a collection of poems, but it would be better if you give it a name, most poetry collections have a name, something that intrigues the reader.

• BLURB : 4/10

The blurb, I think you can work on it, usually it's hard to write a blurb for it. By the way, no one sucks at poetry, it's something that comes from within! I would say, give the reader a taste of your poems, like your favourite stanza, or what inspired this collection.

• FIRST POEM : 7/10

What I absolutely loved about this poem was the emphasis of loneliness, panic and confidence. The rhyme scheme was there, a bit irregular but there, actually, the irregularity helped create the beat. What I would change, is the word "mold" And replace it with something like "she looked in her brain, to see it unfold." Or something similar, it takes away the childish tone and adds ambiguity. One other thing I'd like to point out, the poem would be better decided it stanzas p, giving it a better structure.

• MESSAGE : 9/10

The message was conveyed beautifully! The steps that followed, it felt like I was going down a staircase until an elevator comes to rescue, I really enjoyed it. I also love the use of fricatives. A suggestion would be, use more literary techniques to elevate the message, like assonance.

• GRAMMAR : 8/10

Punctuation is really good, but I would love to see an array of other like semi colons, they would work perfectly in your poem. Check your capital letters and I believe it would be all good!

• CREATIVITY : 8/10

In terms of creativity, I loved the staircase effect, ie the emphasis on the key focuses of the poem. The rhyme scheme also gave it a unique touch.

• STYLE/FLOW : 8/10

I saw the flow, it was beautifully crafted by the rhyme scheme, but some words could be changed to help the message come through better.

• READER INVOLVEMENT : 7/10

It's usually helps to explain to the readers what your poem is about, I understand you weren't confident when you wrote it, but it was amazing! Also, not all poems have to rhyme.

• COMMUNICATION : 4/5

I can see that you take reader's comments seriously Which is great! I also think you can adapt your poems to what readers say too

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 7/10

As a beginner, you should be proud of your self, just a few things to work on and consider, specially the use of techniques. With practise, it will come to you!

• TOTAL : 76/100