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🔖 In Between The Lines

Author : caCrisostomo

Reviewer : _xPandorax_

• COVER : 10/10

The cover is PERFECT. The shadows, the colours, the design, the layout. The title of the book is perfectly wrapped in the lines each letter is made up off. The idea of "reading between the lines" is also well illustrated with the shadows and silhouette of a standing individual. When someone reads the title, or at least when I did, the first thing that came to mind what mystery does this novel hold? What secrets lay ahead. And all these thoughts run through me before reading the story or even your blurb so you've already got me hooked! The colours are also well-chosen as you have the dark mysterious background along with holden like words making them nicely stand out. It appears very simple but also meaningful and I could easily picture what each element means, at least what I think it means. Amazing!!

• TITLE : 10/10

As already mentioned in the cover section, the title itself brings another sense of mystery. Of course, when someone is told to read between the lines, it indicates to look further than the literal meaning and to think beyond that given context. Rather apply it to something else and what more of meaning could lay behind those words. The thing about this title is it can be seen as very vague (meaning it does not narrow down what your novel is really about) but instead makes the person simply get that mystery vibe and click the read button to go ahead and read the blurb, figure what this story is really about. This is in no way a bad thing but instead is a good technique to get people to check out your book just based on the title!

• BLURB : 10/10

The blurb is amazing. Gives an idea of what the book is going to be about. You explain the role of each character which a lot of people tend to forget to do but in fact plays a vital role. I love how you end it off with a question because honestly that is what gets people thinking and continue on to read the book.

• CREATIVITY : 10/10

I have never seen such amazing descriptions in my entire LIFE! The way you describe thing and the way you make everything come together is phenomenal. I love it. The words you use, the diction, the vocabulary is all not too extreme but also not too simple. You incorporate all five senses in the most unique of ways that it honestly makes me envy you and your amazing writing style xD. However, do not worry, I am 100% supporting you and I am definitely going to continue this story on my own later on because honestly, despite it being out of my comfort zone in some ways, its still phenomenal and everyone should at least ready the first part of it!!

• PLOT : 12/15

The plot is amazing and I think it moves at a very well oriented pace. It's interesting and very much unique amongst the millions of stories I've read. One thing I would advise is maybe taking some details away. Detail is IMPORTANT 100% however when a character says something and you go on explaining every aspect of how they said it and the logic behind every word in their sentence, sometimes, that ends up boring the reader. Detail is always welcomed but in the right moments. Sometimes readers just want to move on with the plot, not have to be stopped every piece of dialogue for a paragraph of details and small little descriptions. However believe me, where you do add detail, it's amazing!

• CHARACTERS : 7/10

Characters are very well put together. You can easily figure out what kind of role they'll play in the rest of the novel as well as what kind of persona they hold. Something I think could help readers relate and have a connection to the characters is by putting a small background story. For example how did Ally and Astorious meet or how did their friendship blossom. This helps the reader relate and make those personal connections which makes the novel mean to them all the lot more.

• GRAMMAR : 15/15

Grammar is FLAWLESS. I did not see a single mistake. The way you use colons, semi-colons and commas (things people struggle a lot), is amazing and perfect. It helps that you have good grammar because as someone reads your story, they have a good feel of where to pause and where to continue as well as the significance of that punctuation to the connect and plot. Well done! One thing I would suggest which does not have to do with grammar to be honest, is the length of the chapters. If this was a physical copy then long chapters wouldn't be too much of an issue however because it is online, readers tend to lean towards a bit shorter chapters because normally they read on the go. You could always break chapters up right now and then combine them later if you ever feel like publishing. Of course this is just a suggestion!

• COMMUNICATION : 4/5

For the most part, you connect with your readers very well, using enthusiasm and even emojis haha. There are some that have not been replied to and I don't think you did it in any way personally, maybe it just happened and you weren't aware of it? But just as a small reminder is readers love it when you respond to their comments, even if its simple to the point it may bore you somehow lol. Readers love it when the author of one of their favourite books sees them and notices them. It shows that they are valued and honestly, are not being taken for granted. So just keep that in mind and other than that, keep the enthusiasm going!

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 15/15

I love this book! One of my favourite things about reading is how well the author can describe the scene and allow me as a reader to put myself in that characters shoes. The way you planned this book showing the difference between the narrator of the novel as well as the writer is amazing, something I loved about your first chapter and moving forward. The way you intertwined all the senses into your creative and descriptive writing is unlike something I've ever seen and honestly acts as inspiration for me as I too try to develop my writing. Keep writing and happy reading!!!

• TOTAL : 93/100