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''ᴇᴠᴇʀyᴏɴᴇ ɪꜱ ᴀ ᴡʀɪᴛᴇʀ, ꜱᴏᴍᴇ ᴀʀᴇ ᴡʀɪᴛᴛᴇɴ ɪɴ ᴛʜᴇ ʙᴏᴏᴋꜱ ᴀɴᴅ ꜱᴏᴍᴇ ᴀʀᴇ ᴄᴏɴꜰɪɴᴇᴅ ᴛᴏ ʜᴇᴀʀᴛꜱ.''
- ꜱᴀᴠɪ ꜱʜᴀʀᴍᴀ
We invest our best into writing but at times, the outcome we receive is below our expectations. This could...
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• COVER : 7/10
Cover is ok, but it might not attract potential readers. Although it goes well with the story, it should be more creative.
• TITLE : 9/10
Title goes along with the story.
• BLURB : 8/10
Blurb is attractive, but I didn't feel the necessity of the 1st paragraph. It just gave information which is not much necessary (you can give this information in 1st chapter and it would make blurb more intriguing) and is making the blurb lengthy. The Blurb is meant to be short at the same time should give necessary information and should be attractive enough. There are some typo mistakes as well.
• CREATIVITY : 7/10
Your story is unique. There are actually some people (creators) in that alternate universe who could actually create, which is amazing. But the new generation doesn't even know there is some planet named The earth is actually unrealistic as it's only some years (actually 40) they shifted to Eidle.
• CHARACTERS : 8/10
You have done a wonderful job with character description, especially with Jacob's. But I think you could have described more scenes where readers can feel the depth of his pain of losing his parents, and it would give them a better understanding about his trauma. I really liked how you built all the characters well.
• PLOT : 12/15
had a fair pace and nice detailing. But in the middle I thought the story moved at a fast pace, but since it's a Novella, it's meant to be short. I think you should try to describe the surroundings in more details, especially after chapter 3.
• GRAMMAR : 12 /15
There are grammatical and punctuation errors (like instead of 'All the sudden', it should be 'All of a sudden'). Since the story is completed, I would suggest you, to edit your story by yourself or by any editor.
• COMMUNICATION : 5/5
Communication with the reader makes them connected to the story. You did a great job here.
• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 12/15
All in all, I loved reading the story. The plot looks strong. The characters are great. There's some room for improvement which I believe you can easily fill up.
• TOTAL : 80/100
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