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🔖 Miss Prime Minister

Author : authoressperfekt

Reviewer : welmabardi

• COVER : 8/10

My first impression when I saw the cover was a girl/woman who misplaced her shoes or the story has a connection with shoes then my attention was drawn to the name and I was like ok that's it.
The cover was really eye catchy but I would really prefer it to be like a fashionable/professional lady giving a pose and the colours a little bit dull.

• TITLE : 9/10

For some reason I think I fell in love with the title,it is rare,unique and suite the story.

• BLURB : 7/10

You literally copied your first chapter there I suggest you don't do that, maybe pick a line that would interest people to read towards the ending of your explanation, create it in such a way that it intrigues people to read more, leave more rhetorical questions too and I love the part where you said "Now my question is, does sleeping with your stepbrother count as incest? ". That's one good intriguing statement you should keep.

• CREATIVITY : 9/10

Unlike some books where you can easily tell what's going to happens and how its going to happen yours is quite different, cause they where already together, the question we would be asking now would be are they going to end up together or would she move on.
The POV changing thing is nice both constantly changing them doesn't live much suspense, focus on one POV then seldomly bring in Roman POV.

• PLOT : 13/15

The plot was actually nice,only that your first and second chapter titled 'Julia' seems like the prologue and should be together since it was talking about her past before the next decade came.

• CHARACTERS : 6/10

You didn't really give much information about the character's and there background too, she didn't even have a conversation with her mother also I think Jeremy was not described properly, you only told us he was smart but you forgot to describe him, how do he look?
You should also do more on describing her/he's surroundings, it gives the readers a sensation like they are there or they are the ones in that particular place.
I really love the character's though they have there particular style/personality, Jeremy and Roman are among the best,not to forget our main character she's to kill for lol.

• GRAMMAR : 10/15

Your grammar was nice,I only had problem with your punctuation,like during the first chapter I was wondering whether you had a thing for full stops,you know they are used to end a statement right?

Example you said, We wouldn't and shouldn't be here but my friends had a thing for wanting to crash the largest and biggest parties. Hence us being here. At a disgusting frat house with college boys.
All the full stop there are supposed to be commas except the last one. 'Boys.'

• COMMUNICATION : 5/5

You do reply them it encourages them to read more.

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 12/15

You have a really nice plot at hands,I don't think I have read a story that has this plot,except the falling in love part off course. The year changing thing isn't really advisable its like going to and fro, you can like bring in the main thing you want us to see about there past in a particular scene, like something triggered her/him to remember. You just need to change something's here and there then you would have a great book.❤

• TOTAL : 79/100