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🔖 Tangled (Dark Fanfiction)

Author : aDARKfangirl

Reviewer : belkisaris

• COVER : 10/10

The cover is dark and mysterious, giving a sense of wanting to click on the book and explore it. I haven't seen the series Dark, but I am pretty sure the fans of the series would definitely click on your book based on your cover

• TITLE : 10/10

Just like the cover, the title just fits perfectly to the book, and I found myself eager to explore the story, wanting to know more. Title and covers are difficult to do, and you nailed both of them. That's amazing!

• BLURB : 5/10

I think the blurbs need work. Even though the blurb is supposed to be mysterious and future readers are not supposed to know about the story just get a sense of what it is. I was confused and didn't know what you wanted to portray. I would suggest re-writing it and trying to tell a bit of what is keeping the mysterious part out as it just makes it confusing.

• CREATIVITY : 10/10

I haven't seen the series Dark yet, but I am in love with your story. I don't see very religious talking books like yours and it felt like a refreshing glass of water.

• PLOT : 15/15

The plot is amazing. I haven't seen the show on Netflix, so I only know what you wrote and I like it. I don't read a lot of fanfictions but I do come across them on the reviewing platform and I can tell you I haven't read a plot like yours Great Job!

• CHARACTERS : 5/10

I couldn't connect with the characters the way you wrote the book, assuming
people already know about them. There were brief descriptions of them and moved the story forward. Even Though it's a fanfiction, you should write it assuming no one has seen the TV series. Give us more descriptions of the characters, what do they wear, how they feel? ETC.

• GRAMMAR : 5/15

Grammar needs a lot of work. There were some grammatical mistakes in the chapters and just like with the characters there was a lack of description as well as everything. Everything was through conversation, that's good, but people like to visualise while reading a book. I have downloaded into my computer Grammatically and ProWrittingAid and although it doesn't make the grammar perfect it does help and they have free versions. I also use https://www.descriptionari.com/quotes/smirk/ When I want to show my readers something like anger. Instead of saying the character was angry, I show them a description.

• COMMUNICATION : 5/5

You answered every comment on your book. Keep that up, it will build a
relationship with your readers and you will gain loyal readers in return people appreciate when authors' answers back makes them feel good.

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 15/15

I love your story and was really impressed with it. If you fix the grammar and character development, you will have a goal here. You should feel proud of what you created, monumental job!

• TOTAL : 80/100