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🔖 The Time Mirror

Author : storymov

Reviewer : belkisaris

• COVER : 10/10

I love that the cover is unique and intriguing. If I was surfing through Wattpad and saw that cover I would have clicked on it. You're very talented.

• TITLE : 10/10

Your title is unique too, and brilliantly done. I looked through Wattpad to see if another story was in Wattpad with the same title, and I found none. Titles are hard to do as is hard to keep them unique or interesting and you did that Amazing job!

• BLURB : 3/10

I think the blur is a little messy and confusing. It needs a lot of work. I like the small warning about the book not being edited, but I would keep that as its own sentence and separate the next thing you say. Now the description of the story is a little all over the place too, and a little repetitive. I am not sure who you were talking about, who was the fearful person. The description of Audelia is good and very interesting; I wish you would put more on that on the blur to bring more potential readers, you have an interesting story here and I do want many people to
see it.

• CREATIVITY : 10/10

Your story is unique, I haven't seen a story like yours before and I love that you decided to put it on Wattpad even with grammatical mistakes.

• PLOT : 15/15

The plot is very interesting, and I love the idea of an alternative universe.

• CHARACTERS : 2/10

Characters need a lot of work. I didn't know who was who, and I think there were chapters that had different P.O.V and I didn't know who's P.O.V I was reading. I would suggest stating the P.O.V at the beginning of the chapter if that was the case. The character needs a lot of description. I know what they look like because of the chapter where there was a picture, but writers like to read about their description.because not everyone likes a picture and they would like to imagine the character's on their own.

• GRAMMAR : 2/15

Just like with characterization grammar needs a lot of work and I know you stated at the blur that was the case. There are a lot of amazing readers that don't care and just love to read amazing stories like yours, but there are grammar nazis out there that will be turned off by the grammar mistake. There was a lot of conversation and stating stuff. But there's a need for description instead of stating what's happening readers want to see it. I would suggest joining a book club. I would start one that doesn't have requirements of excellent reviews so you can have some practice, then get into some that would judge the grammar, plots, and characters they will help your story grow. In the meantime, you can download grammatically, which is
free and also ProWrittingAid. I have both and whatever grammatically misses ProWrittingAid tells me and not only that it gives you suggestions on how to make the paragraph better.

• COMMUNICATION : 5/5

You answer every single comment that your readers left, and that's amazing. Never lose that. You also had a few authors note chapter, which was another amazing way to create a relationship with your readers never lose that.

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 15/15

Overall, I did enjoy the story and I can read through grammatical mistakes. I could see where you were taking the story and I like what I was reading. Keep on writing, you are doing great.

• TOTAL : 72/100