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🔖 Delusion or Illusion

Author : aaria101

Reviewer : belkisaris

• COVER : 10/10

The cover is impressive and amazing. Outstanding job at creating one that looks unique and inviting.

• TITLE : 9/10

The title is very unique. There are only one or two titles that I have seen in wattpad with the same title. I think it goes perfectly with the story you are telling.

• BLURB : 5/10

I think the blurb needs a lot of work. Is telling almost the complete story with a few differences. I would try to rewrite it and do a sense of mystery trying to intrigue potential readers and get them to click on this amazing story. I know there are some people that might click on your story with the blurb that you already have as it is an ok one, but there are professional readers that judge a book by its blurb and might feel like they will know how the story would end and keep scrolling away from your story.

• CREATIVITY : 10/10

The story is very creative and completely yours. I can honestly tell you I haven’t read a story like yours and believe me I have read a lot of stories in Wattpad. Impressive job by keeping your story unique, not everyone can do that.

• PLOT : 15/15

Just like the creativity, the plot is impressive. For the review I only read the first five chapters but I wish I had time to read more than I have my feelings about Daisy and her Dating Brandon, but I will once I have more free time. I could tell that you didn’t post chapters out of a whim. This plot has been carefully thought out and nicely developed. Brilliant job.

• CHARACTERS : 8/10

The characters were nicely developed, and each one of them was different, but they were very relatable. They are lacking a lot of descriptions to give us a visual of what they look like. Everything was mostly conversation and how they were feeling about certain situations.

• GRAMMAR : 9/15

The grammar and description need a little work too. I see that you are in a book club and people are already helping with grammar. If you want to edit the chapters without waiting for help from fellow book club members, I may suggest downloading Grammatically into your computer and ProWrittingAid. It is what I use. Whatever Grammatically misses, ProWrittingAid points it out and both of them have free versions so you don’t have to put money. Description not only are a pain to do but sometimes they can be hard so what I do to get inspiration and or help is use a webpage called .https://www.descriptionari.com/  I just put a word or a feeling and I get a lot of examples of how to show future readers instead of telling.

• COMMUNICATION : 5/5

You answered every single comment of your readers, and the only one you left without comment were the ones from fellow book club members. Communicating with readers is a superb way to create a relationship with your readers and keep them coming back for every update, so keep it up.

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 15/15

I love your story and even if I have issues understanding at first, I could see what you were trying to tell.The first two chapters can be broken down into two chapters. For example, the first chapter you can break into chapter one and two, then chapter two break it down into chapter three and four that way you have more room to edit and add more description. Everything felt cramp and rushed and telling. By breaking them into two chapters, you have more room to slow down and develop the chapters better. But other than that you have an amazing chapter and not only I love reading each and every chapter, I will definitely continue reading to see how this amazing story ends.

• TOTAL : 86/100