ᒪIᗷᖇᗩᖇY ᖇᗴᐯIᗴᗯՏ 2.0

🔖 Crown Of Ashes

Author : _candy_cough_

Reviewer : belkisaris

• COVER : 10/10

I LOVE the cover is literally on fire :) Superb job! It's sexy, attractive, and eye-catching. Covers are something that's hard to do, and you nailed yours.

• TITLE : 7/10

The title is fitting to the story and I like it especially because of the amazing book cover, but there is a lot of title's in Wattpad that has the same exact one, if you were talking about your book to someone at school or work, and they search for it, it might take them a while to find your book. I would suggest maybe reading your book over and try to come up with a unique title that no one else has.

• BLURB : 10/10

I love the blurb it says a lot but says nothing keeping a sense of mystery as if telling the readers you want to find out click continue and find out.

• CREATIVITY : 7/10

Your story is unique, and it's yours. But the deadly assassin and the girl losing her parents in the hands of vampires and hating them. But when I clicked on the story that was the only similarities of stories of its genre, everything was new and intriguing from Katherine to talk to the flame and the flame answering back.

• PLOT : 15/15

I am impressed with the plot. I am an Enormous vampire fan, so usually they all are similar at some point, but yours kept me guessing on every chapter and will definitely continue to read in my free time. I need to know if Katherine learns to accept the vampires and what secret she discovers in her mission.

• CHARACTERS : 6/10

I think the characters are done perfectly. But they need more development, before everything was stated instead of shown. For example, when Katherine opened the door to receive the person naked, and she wasn't shy about it. Why is Katherine comfortable showing her naked body? Does she do it often? In the house they all walk around naked? Etc

• GRAMMAR : 10/15

Just like with the character grammar was ok, but descriptions need a lot of work. Everything was told instead of shown. For example, the paragraph: "Oh Fuck your reasons." I spat at him. One minute I was glaring at him and the next I was on the floor clutching my jaw. If you want it to be a surprise, it could be something like: "Oh fuck your reasons." I said I focused on my rage. Suddenly his fist is slamming into my face. Blood pooled in my mouth... You are showing us she got hit instead of saying she got hit.

• COMMUNICATION : 1/5

I saw very little communication with your readers. You don't have to answer every single comment if it's from the same person, but you could acknowledge a thank you for answering one of their questions or comment just to let your readers know you appreciated it.

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 15/15

I am in love with your story as I stated I am a HUGE vampire fan and I am very intrigued by your spin on the story is something I haven't read before and I am looking forward to embarking into this amazing story.

• TOTAL : 81/100