Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

Blissful Blooms

by CoralScholes_

First Impression (Cover, blurb, etc)

- The title is a good representation of the story so far.

- The cover is good, little generic but it works.

- Blurb is well done, the right amount of information.

Mechanics (Grammar, sentence structure, etc)

- There were no obvious mistakes or awkward structures. 

Plot

- The BRITS seems like a very large event compared to the scale of the floral shop, a little disproportionality. It kind of is a bit difficult to picture exactly.

- There maybe could be a little more explanation on what the BRITS are, as maybe not everyone is familiar with it.

- It was a little confusing as to her job title, because it was almost like she was the event planner, not just the florist. Perhaps she could be there before the event, as to set up the flowers. Maybe she could still meet the Kyle while setting up.

- Paparazzi aren't usually allowed in establishments, so perhaps they get swarmed while leaving the restaurant? Or they could be at a window seat or sitting outside.

There was some good dialogue, and great job on the descriptions. Best wishes for the rest of your story!