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First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Cover: The cover is fine.

-Blurb: The blurb is good.

-Title: The title is fitting.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

Grammar errors are seldom to none.

Plot & Characters

- Chapter 4 seems to be packed with exposition which is a bit hard to read and comprehend. It seems little unnatural for her to be asking about the history of werewolves before she asks about what happened to her and other questions about her sudden change.

- In Chapter 5, she meets a lot of people at once so it's hard to keep tabs on everyone.

- Demetri seems to be quite antagonistic without much reason.

This seems like an interesting story unfolding and the writing is comprehensible. Best of luck to you and your writing journey!