Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

The Way of the Wind

By Bezaunungieye

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Cover: The cover is good but the text other than the title is hard to read and the photo in the background makes it so that her face has a pattern on it.

-Blurb: The blurb is okay.

-Title: The title is good.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

The grammar is fine for the most part.

Plot & Characters

- The pacing in the first chapter starts off fine but then is a bit quick near the end.

- It felt odd that the parents (the King and Queen) really wanted the prince to get married, especially not to another royal for political unity.

- Chapter 46- it's odd that Lysia runs into the room and asks what is wrong with the father, and when Lud is brought into the room she knows it's his fault. It seems like she knows what happened but nobody explained it to her (or the readers).

- There's not much explanation on the magic system in this world. Is Alysia the only one who has powers? Are there theories on the origin of her powers? Perhaps exploring more hypothesis about the origins can help readers justify the presence of the powers.

- In Chapter 57, there source of the arrow wasn't determined and it was hard to picture their location.

This story has some good intense moments and an interesting plot. Best of luck to you in your writing journey!