Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

Kepler-168F

by breathingchemicals

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Title: The title is fitting and creative

-Cover: It could use a little pop of something to stand out a bit more, but the cover is clean and elegant, and the font is legible.

-Blurb: The blurb conveys the story well.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

Grammar is fairly good but there are a couple of typos.

Plot

-The plot is interesting, and the action is well executed.

-There are concerns of there being too much exposition in the prologue, especially when it is during the action. Readers might find themselves wanting to skip the exposition to find out what happens in the action scene.

-There is potential in exploring her time while training instead of skipping to where she is already trained after quite some time.

Characters

-She has a good sense of determination and strength that is apparent in her actions and thoughts.

Overall, this story is interesting and has a lot to explore. Though there are some technicalities that could be reviewed, this story gets the conversation started on social issues that are relevant and important.