Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

How It All Goes

By: atzirybe

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title) 

-Title: The title is a little vague. 

-Cover: The cover is nice but perhaps can use a font that makes a bigger impact.
-Blurb: the blurb is a little lengthy, but it is fine. 

Mechanics: 

There are a couple of errors here or there, but generally there is good grammar and sentence structures. 

Plot: 

-At the beginning, there is a lot of information about the character's life. Perhaps readers will be able to engage more when the book opens with the airport scene, and we learn about her family and background as we go.

- It starts out with some of her opinions about high school, but it's a bit odd given that the story's setting is not focused around high school. 

Characters: 

-Alex sounds like a great character with background and values, and with a sassy but engaging personality. However, in the prologue, it doesn't come across as much when she is explaining her life story. 

-Perhaps if the audience learns about her story as Noah gets to know her, the initial information at the beginning doesn't have to set up her character for the readers. It is like unraveling a bit of a mystery as we go instead of being given all the information up front. We can then start to see her character shine. 

Alex seems like a great character with a lot of potential and has a meaningful story. Showing some of her values and experiences during the trip might highlight these attributes. Good luck with your story!