Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

Accio Lightsaber

By: abiggerfish

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

- Cover: The cover is nice.

- Blurb: The blurb is fine.

- Title: The title is good.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

There are a couple mistakes here or there but not many.

Plot & Characters

- There is not much explanation on why Anakin has to be trained at Hogwarts in the ways of the Jedi, instead of being trained by a Jedi. One suggestion is to slow down the story and let the readers enjoy more details in the world and in the character's experience at Hogwarts.

- In Episode IV, it seemed like Anakin wore different robes than the other students at Hogwarts.

- [Spoiler ahead] In Episode V, Anakin eliminates someone, but does not face any consequences from the school's administration. Perhaps adding in more of a reaction from the students (screams, emotion, etc) as well as having to do damage control (like using the force to convince administration to keep Anakin enrolled?) would help better set the scene.

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