Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

Epiphanic by Turns

BY -ruwinx

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Cover: The cover is alright but gives off fantasy vibes.

-Blurb: The blurb is good but there seems to be two of them.

-Title: The title is a little confusing as to what it means or how it relates to the story.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

The grammar is alright. A few errors here or there and there are a lot of extra commas, especially in the beginning.

Plot & Characters

-There are a few references to a god without setting up what religion it is.

- Nicah's personality is a bit hard to decode in the beginning

- In Chapter 4, she reads a letter from her mother, Adrianne. Her mother signs it "Adrianne" instead of "Mom" or "Mother", etc.

- When Pixie was first introduced in Chapter 5, she spoke in first person, but in Chapter 7, she speaks in third. 

It will be interesting to see where this story goes, there seems to be some mysteries unfolding. Best of luck to you in your writing journey!