Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

Catching My Breath

By: cherryistie

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Cover: The cover is nice.

-Blurb: The blurb works.

-Title: The title makes sense.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

The grammar is pretty spotless.

Plot & Characters

- At the end of chapter five, it said she was looking at Ren's results. Were the medical results? Did she have access to it because she was a nurse? Because if so, that seems to be a breach in patient confidentiality. Unless she was a family member who also had access to his results, which wouldn't make much sense either because she is not a member of Ren's family.

- It felt weird that Ren didn't want to do the surgery. Even though it there was an explanation as to how he felt misunderstood and why he didn't want to do the surgery, it still felt like he wanted to see and the risk didn't seem nearly as much as the reward. If it works out, he sees again, and if it doesn't, the status quo is unchanged.

- It seemed kind of odd that Ren would forget colors if he was sixteen when he lost his sight. Though it's perhaps possible, it does not seem likely.

This seems like a nice romance with some different elements of physical and mental health. Best of luck to you in your writing journey!