Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

Woodward

By: samglyph

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Title: The title seems appropriate to the story.

-Cover: The cover is excellently done, but the only comment here would be that it is a little hard to read the author's name.

-Blurb: The blurb is good.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

- A couple of typos here and there but the grammar is pretty good.

- When explaining the prince's gender, the point of view switched from Third person limited to all omniscient narrator.

Plot and Characters:

- The worldbuilding could use a little more attention, it could maybe feature more exposition.

- The question that comes up for us is why are they living at the edge of a dangerous forrest?

- It was unclear as to why some of the faeries spoke informally and some spoke formally.

- There was once a mention of "Penny," which is assumed to be the mother, but it might be good to connect those dots for readers.

- It could be argued that James can be a little inconsistent in acting his age, sometimes acting a bit older than his age.

- The idea of evil faeries in a forest that make you disappear isn't exactly new, but perhaps as the story goes on,

- Chapter one is clear and concise, leaving with not exactly a cliffhanger but with enough suspense for the reader to want to know more. Well done. 

- Feels like a good pacing going along.

- Definitely a page-turner.

Excellent start, it will be interesting to see where this story develops. Keep up the good work, and best of luck to your writing journey.