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Peacock Feathers

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By: Seowrites

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

Title: The title is fine.

Cover: The cover is nice but there is a lot of blank space and the font is very simple.

Blurb: The blurb is good.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

The grammar is alright.

Plot & Characters:

- The story has a lot of exposition. There is a lot in the beginning, but throughout the story, there's quite a few paragraphs of info dumping that makes it hard to read the story.

- It takes quite a bit of time to get to the action of the story, or the inciting incident.

- Some of the chapter titles are the numbers written out and some are just the numerical numbers.

This story handles a lot of the issues teens face today. We wish you the best of luck in your writing journey!