Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

Star Child. From Orion

By AveraLunaFirst Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Title: The period after "Child" is curious.

-Cover: The cover is good, but the font is a little simple.

-Blurb: The blurb is fine.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

There doesn't seem to be too many grammar issues.

Plot

- The story has a dream or nightmare near the beginning. However, many of the events that happen afterwards do not address the dream or have connections to it. Although it is recognized that the dream's significance will probably be revealed and explored later on in the story, it felt a little random and confusing as to why it was featured at the beginning.

- The pacing is kind of slower on the front end, the 'before the adventure' part. Though set up is important, it felt a bit long before we got to the fantasy part of the story.

The following two points express Ellie's opinions:

- The story felt well balanced in terms of slowly becoming informed of the fantasy world as Stella learns about it.

- Great world building, and well developed characters (especially the fantastical)

Characters

- Perhaps it is a character quirk, but we found it odd that her friend, Lena, used "sweetheart" and "sweetie" often when addressing her peers.

This seems like an engaging story with many things to discover. We wish you the best of luck as you continue your writing journey!