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Scaredy Cat

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By: wetcandle

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Cover: The title's font is nice but the graphic is a little dim so it's hard to make out what it is exactly.

-Blurb: The blurb is a little short, perhaps add something more about what the conflict is and a bit more about the main characters.

-Title: The title is nice.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

The grammar is pretty good.

Plot & Characters

- The story can use a little more setup, the pacing can slow down a little.

- The dialogue is made up of a lot of exposition, as the characters talk they voice a lot of what can be internal monologue so the dialogue remains more natural.

- The characters were not cliche. For example, it was nice see a nerd that wasn't a complete stuttering mess.

This seems like a nice story in the making. Best of luck to you in your writing journey!