Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

Disastrous Ties

By: Capellarc

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Cover: The cover is lovely.

-Blurb: The blurb is fine.

-Title: The title is good.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

There's a few typos but nothing too distracting.

Plot & Characters

- In the first chapter, there are a lot of names that are introduced without context. Perhaps consider spending more time describing the characters physical looks to the readers.

-Some parts went a bit fast and maybe could use more descriptions, like her fall in Chapter 3. For example, what did she experience with her five senses?

- In Chapter 4, she gives her husband a nickname in her thoughts but doesn't really explain it until later (I think it might've been mentioned in Chapter 31) so it was a little confusing. A suggestion would be to mention her logic behind it earlier so as to enlighten the readers sooner.

This story has some funny and endearing moments. Best of luck to you in your writing journey!