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To Capture a Heart

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By ViDisha21

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Cover: The cover is fine.

-Blurb: The blurb is good.

-Title: The title works.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

-There is little to no grammar issues.

- With the chapter titles, there's typically no punctuation. So a suggestion would be to take off the colon and the dash.

Plot & Characters

- The prose is comprehensive and easily understandable.

- The story starts off a little bit slow, it takes awhile to get somewhere.

- There doesn't seem to be too much of a hook to really grab readers in the beginning.

- The main character is a bit generic. Perhaps add hobbies or skills to deepen the character.

- There's a lot of characters so it's hard to really get to know each of them on a personal level so a suggestion would be to develop all the main characters a bit more.

This seems like a nice teenfic romance. We wish you the best of luck to you in your writing journey!