By: Amy400
First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)
-Cover: The cover is fine.
-Blurb: The blurb works.
-Title: The title is alright.
Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)
The grammar is good for the most part.
Plot & Characters
- The word path is used quite frequently, so to cut down the amount of times its used might help lower the repetition.
- One suggestion would be to give the boy a name to cut down on the amount of times the word 'boy' is used, and also to clarify which boy when there's a new boy near the end.
- There could perhaps be a bit more strong emotions.
The story is nice and has a good ending. Best of luck to you in your writing journey!
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