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By KesseyCoos

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Title: The title is fine.

-Cover: The cover looks great.

-Blurb: The blurb is good and comprehensible.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

There does not seem to be any grammar issues.

Plot

- The pacing could perhaps use a little slowing down:

a. Maybe showing the attack would be an interesting addition to the story.

b. Perhaps a little more lead-in before he's approached by the older students, a little more about what happened before would better orient the readers.

- He seems a little oddly hostile towards people who seem to know what's going on.

- It's refreshingly different compared to some werewolf stories on Wattpad, but the story feels like a lot of other stories in the werewolf story genre- perhaps try to find novel aspects to make it stand out a little more.

Characters

-Great character chemistry, and characterization.

From what is up so far, it seems like a nice story. Best of luck for the writing journey ahead!