Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

The Murder Files

By: Bings2004

First Impression: (Cover, Blurb, Title)

- Cover: The cover could use some work, as the tape recorder is not very visually attractive, and does not give a strong sense of the story. The title is a bit hard to see, and there isn't the author's name. 

- Title: The title seems fitting for the story.

- Blurb: The blurb is good, as it covers the basics and it is intriguing.

Mechanics: (Grammar, Sentence structure)

The mechanics are good, nothing that looked like an issue.

Plot:

-The plot itself is interesting, and the investigation at the beginning of the chapter and in between the narrative is well executed.

-There are a couple things here and there that feel a little too good to be true, or at least maybe not explained or justified as much as it could be, such as an eleven-year-old watching the news casually. Perhaps something acknowledging that it's an unusual choice, or it was the program that was already on, etc. Or not, since I suppose she is the narrator and might not realize it is more on the unusual side.

Characters:

-The voice of the main character is young, matching the age and portraying a nice sense of innocently dark.

I think that this story is a figurative page turner, and has a good narrative voice. I can't wait to see what happens next! Wishing you the best on your writing journey.

-Ellie