Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

God Complex

By: DelilahKhadaroo

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title) 

Title: The title is fitting.

Cover: The cover is nice.

Blurb: The blurb is good.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

There were no obvious grammar mistakes spotted.

Plot & Characters:

- In the first chapter, it starts off relatively easy to understand and then it just jumps into an urban fantasy world without explaining a lot. A suggestion would be to skip the first chapter, imply what happens later on, and take time to really describe how the magic school works.

- Chapter 3 references a DL but doesn't explain it. It explains later, but perhaps consider explaining it sooner.

- This story is heavy on the politics and universe happenings, be careful of overwhelming the reader with new names and information.

- In Chapter 9, it is not clear why they didn't just use their rings instead of the portal.

This is good story, has a great use of cliffhangers, and manages multiple main characters well. Best of luck to you in your writing journey!