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My Life Matters

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BY RecoIsBlessed

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Title: The title is fine.

-Cover: The cover is great.

-Blurb: The blurb is good.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

There are some minor grammar issues, but nothing too distracting.

Plot & Characters

- The pacing is a little slow and there are a lot of chapters.

- In the opening of the story, there is a lot of monologging about how bad his life is, but it isn't as impactful as letting the readers experience it and coming to the conclusion that his life is awful themselves. Perhaps at least disperse his own reflections about his life in later chapters.

- It could simply be a matter of style and preference, but there seemed to be a lot of melodrama that weighed for a long time without reprieve which made it a bit more arduous to read.

The story has some good dialogue and it's easy to read and comprehend. Best of luck to you in your writing journey!