Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

For A Reason

By: dreamlucid2

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Title: The title seems appropriate.

-Cover: The cover is okay, but the author's name is a little lackluster and there is a lot of negative space above the title.

-Blurb: The blurb is fine.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

-The grammar seems to be pretty spotless.

- One minor suggestion would be to include "Fahrenheit" after mentioning "46 degrees" when referring to the weather in Chapter 14, as the measurement system is not always a given due to the fact that Wattpad is an international platform.

Plot

- The information we learn in the prologue could be interworked into the story, and the prologue could be skipped over since it doesn't add too much to the story.

-[Spoiler about the ending ahead] Perhaps consider spelling out why the relationship wouldn't be able to work out at the moment because of their situation. Just because she isn't going to work for him anymore doesn't inherently mean that she has to stop seeing him. It didn't make much sense to us that their relationship could not continue just because she was switching jobs.

Characters

- There is a sister introduced in Chapter 28 but she is not mentioned prior, so she seems to come out of nowhere.

- Vanessa's husband is not that developed as a character, neither is the best friend.

- It feels a bit difficult to like Chris in the beginning, due to the sexist comment about marriage, which seemed sort of random and out of character. 

This is a story with some good twists and turns. Best of luck with your writing journey!