Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

ISAIAH'S STORY

By SethAMott

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

- TItle: It doesn't sound like a horror story right off the bat, but it's alright.

- Cover: The color scheme on the cover is nice but it gives off more cheerful vibes than thrilling or scary.

- Blurb: The burb covers all the bases of a good blurb.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

The mechanics check out, the language is easy to understand and it flows nicely.

Plot

-One suggestion is to start the story in a different place and time, it takes a little while to get started.

-It was also noted that the shadow at the beginning of the story when they first moved in was not addressed very much, or really noted by the boy. It seems a little ignored, not acknowledged that it happened.

-We feel like this story is more in the dark fantasy, or fantasy adventure genre, there are certain elements of horror that aren't as emphasized, like atmospheric details that really creep you out. Perhaps it's the mood to begin with that confuses the environment.

Characters

-The boy had a good narrative voice, appropriate for a ten-year-old, but still comprehensible.

Overall, there is a lot of good language, structure, and storytelling. We wish you the best on your writing journey ahead!