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By Jarvis1989

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Title: The title is fine.

-Cover: The cover is good, but the font for the title is a little underwhelming.

-Blurb: The blurb works

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

- There are some minor grammatical errors.

- It is not necessary to have many exclamation points, as sometimes a period can be just as effective.

Plot & Characters

- In chapter one, it doesn't introduce Ravi, so we don't know who he is or what his role is in the story.

- In chapter seven, the morality of the main characters is questionable when they promise to save the wife if Slater confessed and Slater confesses, but they shoot the wife and frame him for it.

- The resolution is very rushed. Perhaps readers would enjoy more detail on how everything works out in the end.