Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

The Most Colorful Souls

By: swell_michelle

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Title: The title is a good title.

-Cover: Eye-catching cover (literally) but it is a little hard to see how it represents the story, at least at this point. But great font placement.

-Blurb: While good, perhaps it might reveal a bit too much. Maybe the dad's return can be a neat twist.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

- A couple of grammatical errors were spotted, but not too many.

Plot & Characters

- It was interesting that she blocked him after only one text.

- The guy's POV was novel and not always done in teen fic, so well done

This sounds like a great start to a story that has potential. Wishing you the best of luck on your writing journey!