Elephant Reviews [CFCU]

NØ Return - Rock the Miles Away

By: MonicaPrelooker

First Impressions (ex. Cover, blurb, title)

-Title: The title is fine, but from an outsider's point of view at first glance, it doesn't tell much about the plot.

-Cover: The cover is nice.

-Blurb: The blurb is fine.

Mechanics (ex. Grammar, sentence structure, etc.)

Only a couple minor typos or grammar mistakes, but otherwise pretty flawless.

There was a good handle on the point of views.

Plot/Characters

- Excellent story, lots of good writing and metaphors.

- One comment would be that it does feel a little long and perhaps drawn out a little. A possible remedy could be to split it into a series of three novellas.

(The following reflects Ellie's opinion)

- I really enjoyed Silvia's personality and the way she interacted with Jay/Jim.

- I especially loved Chapter 83, The Edge. The way she handled herself and the way the emotions played out was great.

- Another part I really enjoyed was the end of Chapter 94, Behind the Sun, (the parallel chapter, 95), and then the iconic Chapter 96.

- I liked how the story included some Brazilian culture that felt well explained and integrated. 

I think that you created really compelling characters that told a more unique narrative. Best of luck to you with your writing!